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In this poem I live on. by =tyrannusBE:icontyrannusBE:



Stanza’s, lyrics,
all around.
Inside them all,
our souls be found.

Write a poem,
write a song.
Write a story,
deep and long.

Between the words,
behind the lines.
Something lingers,
almost devine.

Wether shot, burned, hung,
or simply perished from old age.
Never truly gone,
always on a stage.

For after I am dead,
long gone.
In this poem,
I live on.
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Author's Comments

Inspired by an equally-minded poem by William Shakespeare, although he made someone else live for ever. I guess I'm just a tad more selfish then old Bill.
It's the first time I've written one, or at least one with a decent rythm and rhyme-scheme. So tell me what you think, that I might improve on myself.
This poem is not for any contest or anything, but if one should come my way, I'd most probably use this one, so hands off, leachers!

P.S.: I'm quite satisfied with it myself ^^

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:iconlbchef:
good job. I really liked it :D

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:icontyrannusbe:
thanks. However, you poeple are supposed to be helping me improve on myself. I can't imropve on myself if there's nothing to improve on. Hence, I need negative critique. So say somethig bad about me.

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:iconlbchef:
ummmm.... sorry I got nothing lol

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:iconryfusd:
Nice poem :D
My favorite part was:

Between the words,
behind the lines.
Something lingers,
almost devine.....awwww

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Life is like a work of art. God is the artist.
We are the tools and He uses us
to create something worth while. :heart:
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this is the reason i love poetry.....

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-Max
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:icontyrannusbe:
Is that a good thing or a

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:icontyrannusbe:
or a bad thing?

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:icontyrannusbe:
yeah, ALMOST. :rofl:

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:icontyrannusbe:
Why thank you...

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:iconryfusd:
:giggle:

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:painter: My Art :stormtrooper: :kitty:
~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Life is like a work of art. God is the artist.
We are the tools and He uses us
to create something worth while. :heart:

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